Grammar EA1101/ET1000/NK1001 Editing 20
Text Editing 1. 2. There are TEN (10) errors in the following text. The errors are found only in the numbered sentences, and only one error in each of them. Underline the error in the numbered sentence, then write your correction in the numbered blank space on the right side of the text. 3. After your correction, write a brief explanation of the type of error: noun, pronoun, subject-verb agreement, word form, verb form, tense, preposition, article or parallelism. Note that not all these items will be tested. Some may be repeated. Example: (0) The world awake one Sunday in late July... (0) world awoke We need the past tense as the context is about what happened last July.
Kana "Massacre" Was a Fake
Hillel Fendel
The world awoke one Sunday in late July 2006 to the news that an Israeli air strike had killed 57 Lebanese civilians, leading Israel to stop air strikes for two days. Immediately all over the world sympathy was felt for the innocent Lebanese and Israel was blamed for being so callous. (1)But now evidence show the (1) ________________________ "massacre" is probably just a fraud propagated by the media. The supposed massacre caused a major turnabout in world diplomacy. (2)American Secretary of State Condoleezza Rice suddenly cancelled her plans to fly to Beirut and fly to (2) Jerusalem instead to negotiate a ceasefire. The implication was ________________________ clearly that the onus was now upon Israel. French President Jacques Chirac condemned Israel's "unjustified action which demonstrates more than ever the need for an immediate ceasefire," Jordan's King Abdullah called it an "ugly crime," and other world leaders echoed these sentiments. But that is not the end of the story. (3)Apparently, however, the incident could well be one big fraud case, staged by Hezbullah (3) supporters for the world media in order to lead precisely at the ________________________ situation described above. The central piece of evidence leading to this conclusion is the fact that the building collapsed a full seven hours after the Israel Air Force bombing. Why would the residents inside not have been evacuated in the meantime? Brig.-Gen. Amir Eshel of the Israeli Air Force told reporters right from the very beginning that it was difficult for 1
him to believe that they waited eight whole hours before they decided to evacuate the building. (4)Without addition evidence, Eshel could only leave open his suspicion that Hezbullah terrorists, or the explosives they left behind, caused the (4) explosion. ________________________ (5)Furthermore, Robert Spencer of FrontPage Magazine writes, "It strains credulity that not only did these Lebanese civilians remained in a house that had been bombed for eight hours, but (5) peacefully went to sleep in it after the bombing. It was reported ________________________ that the victims were all apparently sleeping, despite continuing Israeli air bombardment in the area, when the building collapsed." Gen. Eshel also said that the building was used by Hezbullah to store explosives. (6)This was supported by a letter from Dr Mounir Herzallah, a southern Lebanese Shiite, who wrote that Hezbullah terrorists came to his town, dug a munitions depot (6) and then a build school and a residence directly over it. ________________________ In addition, the bombing of the area occurred in three waves. (7)The first bomb, according to a CNN correspondent, did not hit a building in question, but rather landed "20 or 30 meters" away. The second strike hit targets further away, and the third (7) strike, around 7:30 in the morning, landed over 400 meters ________________________ away. The first reports of a collapsed building only arrived a half-hour later. Another CNN correspondent, Ben Wedeman, noted that there was a larger crater next to the building. He observed that the roof of the building was intact and that the building appeared not to have collapsed as a result of the Israeli strike. The building, probably used to store explosives, was apparently not destroyed by the bombing, and sheltered dozens of women and children throughout a night of bombing. (8)The identity of the victim was also not clear, except that they were not the original occupants of the building; a National Public Radio correspondent reported that the original occupants had left. "The victims were non-residents who chose to shelter (8) in the building that night," and who were "too poor" to leave the ________________________ town, one resident told CNN. One begins to wonder who these people were. Furthermore, the hospital in Tyre, Lebanon, and Human Rights Watch both reported that day that 28 people were killed in the Kana bombing, and not twice that number, as originally reported. (9)Other facts, that were revealed by Robert Spencer of FrontPage Magazine, showed further strange happenings. Some time after dawn a call went out to journalists and rescue 2
workers to come to the scene. Though Hezbullah had been (9) claiming that civilians could not freely flee the scene due to ________________________ Israeli destruction of bridges and roads, the journalists and rescue teams from nearby Tyre had no problem getting there. Strangely, Lebanese rescue teams did not start evacuating the building until after the camera crews came. The absence of a real rescue effort was explained by saying that equipment was lacking. There were no scenes of living or injured people being extracted from the collapsed building. Rescue workers carrying the victims on stretchers occasionally flipped up the blankets so that cameras could show the faces and bodies of the dead. (10)"Most notably," Robert Spencer writes, "the dating of the various photographs suggest that the same bodies were paraded before reporters on different occasions, each time as if they had just been pulled out from the rubble. In addition, some (10) workers are wearing different gear in different photographs, yet ________________________ clearly carrying the same corpse." Thus the Lebanese French website LIBANOSCOPIE has charged that Hezbullah staged the entire incident in order to stimulate calls for a ceasefire, thereby staving off its destruction by Israel and the Lebanese government to rid themselves of this terrorist plague. We cannot, but conclude that our world media is not used to dealing with carefully orchestrated and large-scale deception of this kind. It is time that it be recognized as a weapon of warfare, and an extremely potent one at that!
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