Asgnt 5 Peer Critique(Tim)

Asgnt 5 Peer Critique(Tim) - Chantel Wynter ENG 201 Barbara...

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Chantel Wynter ENG 201 – Barbara Cole Peer Critique – Timothy Marlowe Dear Tim, Your essay is a good start; I was able to recognize your thesis in the introduction “Although the introduction of pharmaceutical drugs has improved the quality of life, it also has lead to negatives of a new medicine-dependent American culture. Unfortunately, a “typical American” is now an individual entirely dependent upon medicine.” This is a good although throughout your essay you did not try to prove it. As I was reading I see you mention several cases in where you believe a person has to be dependent on the pharmaceutical drug in order to cure their condition. When you states facts of the effects of the condition on a person if they do not take their medication seems as if you are arguing against your thesis. So, this gives me the notion that you’re contradicting your ideas. You did good research when finding out about each condition but your analysis after you mention the effects do not seem to agree with your thesis. The fact that you did not connect your analyses with your thesis may have been the reason why
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