ENG201 - Asgnt3 PC1

ENG201 - Asgnt3 PC1 - Chantel Wynter ENG 201 Barbara Cole...

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Chantel Wynter ENG 201 – Barbara Cole Assignment #3 Peer Critique – Joseph Lavo Dear Joseph, Although I know the essay is not completed there is still a lot of work that needs to be done. A good thing is that I can figure out exactly what you will be talking about throughout your essay, giving the idea of your thesis as seen in your introduction. “It is wrong that Japanese American internment has not been taught so well in public schools and that history books are just starting to put information on that subject in their books. Japanese American Internment should not be forgotten and should very much be part of our American history” This a good thesis but can reworded in a way to make it into more of an argument “The Japanese American Internment not being in history books and not being taught to its entirety is wrong on many levels because it is so convenient to the shape of American history which shouldn’t be forgotten.” Maybe something like that can help because it is more of an argument form. Also, you should mainly check the way you word your sentences for example “It was
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