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Unformatted text preview: Chantel Wynter Writing 101 Peer Critique Student: Stacy Walnock Stacy, the start to your essay is a good one. Your thesis was also good; it grasped the point of being argumentative in order to create an efficient essay. You did well with your start of providing support to proving your thesis by taking examples from Du Bois essay. I also liked how you used Baldwins essay to support your thesis by looking into the idea that Du Bois was pointing out about seeing oneself from the outside. Also although your concepts and supporting ideas for your thesis are good I feel that mainly in your introduction it needs to be more clear and not really focus on a single idea that you will mention somewhere in the rest of your essay. Overall if when you finish your essay it will indeed be a good one. Chantel Wynter Writing 101 Peer Critique Student: Chantel Bable Chantel, you have a very good essay. But, there are some parts that can use improvement such as, you should elaborate on certain points especially a potentially outstanding point that can...
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This essay was uploaded on 04/11/2008 for the course ENG 201 taught by Professor Recny during the Spring '08 term at SUNY Buffalo.
- Spring '08