Unformatted text preview: you made good connections with the texts through your quotes. My only suggestion would be that you could go more into the connection of your thesis and the story “Thanksgiving in A Moonsoonless Land”. You only made a slight connection at the end of the paragraph “This symbolizes the fact that her legacies will remain American, with on regard of color or ethnicity. Being a “true” American is not exclusive to white people. ..” this was very goof but there should be more added on to it, Now your conclusion could have been perceived to be another body paragraph just by the mention of something. If you work on these few things your essay would be greater than it is....
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- Spring '08
- English, Short story, Debut albums, White American, Chantel Wynter ENG