Unformatted text preview: author’s thesis statement. The author also showed a great use of vocabulary from the course book in his text which put great emphasis on many of his details. Most importantly, the writer clearly and concisely defined the elements which supported his thesis statement of adolescent balance. In the thesis of “David and Moses” the writer lacked continuity of thought and missed completely the intentions of the artist Pisano, while creating the subtractive stone works. The writer consistently views the images negatively instead of as intended. In addition, he makes statements of facts without substantiation. This essay was more difficult for me to read which forced me to read and re-read because thing did not make sense, and seemed like he was trying to force in some of the text book terms. Over all, the entire essay “Davis and Moses” was easily recognized as the C paper....
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- Spring '08
- Writing, Grammatical gender, adolescent balance