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Mendoza 1 Yesenia Mendoza [Be sure to format your essay to MLA guidelines. Check out this link to help: ] Writing 122 Instructor Weiss 13 December 2016 Yesenia, Thank you for submitting your essay to eTutoring.org . My name is Katie, and I will be your tutor today. You did a nice job in integrating sources for your essay, and I like how your thesis is clear and concise! Well done! You asked for help with grammar, and I am happy to assist. Please see my comments in the body of your essay with help in grammar, and any other areas I thought would help your essay. Good luck, and happy editing! Katie Gun Control Debate Guns can protect and save lives but in reality, they kill more lives than they save. Ev- ery year an average of more than 100,000 people are shot in America in murders, [Space.] as- saults, suicides, and accidents, or by police intervention; [Space] according to the Brady campaign to prevent gun violence. On December 30, 2014 in Hayden, Ohio, 29-year-old Veronica Rutlede, was killed when her two year old son reached into her purse, unlocked her handgun, and shot her. Gun related accidents occur every day in America, because too many people don t understand the responsibilities of owning a gun. Clearly, the two year old boy isn t responsible for his mother s death; it s our society's responsibility, because that woman should not have had a gun in the first place [Avoid making generalizations.] . Maybe if the mother would have taken gun safety classes and was well informed about the dangers of owning a gun then all this could have been prevented. In order to make the Unites States a safer country to live in, stricter gun control laws needs [need] to be created and enforced to limit gun ownership and close loopholes, with the goal of ending these unnecessary violent acts. Enforcing strict gun control laws will reduce violence in the United States. It wouldn't be possible for the united stated [United States. Proofread your essay for little mistakes.] to remove the second amendment which is right to bear arm and it also wouldn't be possible to get rid of a gun problem by giving everyone guns. Gun control does not always work, and in the United States it is best if we have stricter gun control laws.
Mendoza 2 The laws that we have now regarding gun control are still not enough to keep us safe. Our laws regulate the sales and possession, and use of firearms and ammunition, [Make sure to proofread to make sure you have spaces inserted between commas.] but state laws are differ- ent. The problem is that states have different laws; they either are more or less enforced than oth- ers. For those who want a gun control law to restrict the possession and sale on guns, then it would need to be enforced in every state and people in each state think differently therefore there would be chaos.

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