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EVALUATION OF THE HEALTH POSTURE ASSISTANCE PROPOSAL This report evaluates the Health Posture Assistance (HPA) proposal for the Technoprenership competition. The proposal highlights the prevalent issue of unhealthy sitting postures among employees working in an office setting, which has led to ergonomic issues. To tackle the abovementioned issue, the proposed solution was for HPA to monitor any improper posture, send corresponding notifications and instructions to the user to guide them to a safe position. The objective of this evaluation report is to assess the proposal to determine if it should be shortlisted for the competition. The evaluation criteria chosen are (1) clarity of writing, which assesses the coherence and cohesion of the ideas expressed; (2) appropriateness of language used, which analyses word choice, grammar, and sentence structures; and (3) persuasiveness of the proposal. The proposal shows poor clarity of writing as the author made many unsubstantiated claims and sweeping statements. For instance, the author claimed that people spend a significant amount of

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