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EVALUATION OF THE HEALTH POSTURE ASSISTANCE PROPOSALThis report evaluates the Health Posture Assistance (HPA) proposal for the Technoprenershipcompetition. The proposal highlights the prevalent issue of unhealthy sitting postures amongemployees working in an office setting, which has led to ergonomic issues. To tackle theabovementioned issue, the proposed solution was for HPA to monitor any improper posture, sendcorresponding notifications and instructions to the user to guide them to a safe position.The objective of this evaluation report is to assess the proposal to determine if it should beshortlisted for the competition. The evaluation criteria chosen are (1) clarity of writing, whichassesses the coherence and cohesion of the ideas expressed; (2) appropriateness of languageused, which analyses word choice, grammar, and sentence structures; and (3) persuasiveness ofthe proposal.The proposal shows poor clarity of writing as the author made many unsubstantiated claims andsweeping statements. For instance, the author claimed that people spend a significant amount of