Narrative Peer Review - Stroder 1 Jeremiah Stroder Mr Steve...

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Stroder 1 Jeremiah Stroder Mr. Steve Wyrick CCP, ENG-1101(6) 7 September 2018 Peer Review: Educational History Narrative (Riggs) Like every story, there seemed to be some parts of this essay that are great and some that are not so great. There were also several grammatical errors although they aren’t the main focus of this peer review. One of the main issues with this story was sentence structure. A lot of sentences seemed to be well thought out but ended up not making sense because of the way they typed out and the structure of the sentence as a whole. Words often seemed to be placed at the beginning of a sentence that would sound better at the end of a sentence. An example of this is the very first sentence of the essay when you wrote, “You look out into the crowd on one of the most prestigious stages in the country.” It would probably be better for you to said “Imagine looking out into the crowd” or “Picture yourself looking out into the crowd” instead of saying “You look out into the crowd”, as though there were text leading up to that sentence. Even though I can understand this because I often have trouble translating my thoughts onto the paper, changes must still be made to fix the issues regarding sentence structure. The way you write a
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  • Winter '16
  • Wyrick
  • Writing, Short story, Grammatical tense

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