Unformatted text preview: author brings us into the different lives of two friends. Although the article is a creative piece in regards to its plot, it lurks greatly in its transitioning and flow. Each transitioning seems to be hanging, which leaves the readers with lesser information on the events. The author should articulate his story in an excellently written form by avoiding jumping from one point to another. While the story is written in basic English, the authors, sentence structuring is wanting. The author needs to improve on the sentence structuring and employ the use of vocabulary to excite the readers and make the story less boring....
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- Fall '15