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Salmon 1 Dear Professor Gonzalez, I believe the strongest part in my essay is my body paragraphs. I gave my best effort to include important evidence from Brent Staples essay, and I liked how it turned out. My body paragraphs connect to the thesis and support my side of the argument. I also state clear facts about what strategies Staples uses in his essay. It was not very difficult for me to make the essay because of the many strategies I learned in class. The part where I had trouble was being specific on my thesis but I read through it a couple of times and I got it to explain clearly what I was going to be writing about. My peers thought my essay was good and just made a couple of suggestions on my thesis. I found the suggestions really helpful because I realized it needed a little more detail than it had. They also noticed just a couple of grammatical errors and I fixed them right away. I would like you to focus on the organization of my paragraphs and my transitions. I tend to mess up on transitions but get through it at the end of the day. I would also like for you to suggest how I can improve my introduction. I believe it was strong but I would still like for you to give me some feedback on it. Thank you for taking your time to read my paper.

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