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Address the critique Plan to fix it Rough Draft Revision Introduction needs to be shorter. I will move certain points from my introduction to other parts of my speech as sometimes I elaborate too much. Unfortunately, most of the dogs and cats in these mills are neglected to the point where they have horrible living conditions. Most of the time these animals are just kept there until they can no longer produce offspring. 1 st Point Animal mills are places that speciafically keep dogs and cats sp that they can breed. Most of the time these animals are just kept there until they can no longer produce offspring. Get to the point quicker I will stop repeating myself as much Introduction Puppy and kitten mills are institutions that specialize in breeding and selling offspring. 1 st Point So what exactly are puppy and kitten mills? Introduction Puppy and kitten mills are institutions that specialize in breeding and selling offspring.

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