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Jason Perez Ms. Tomei-Jameson Fundamental Speech and Communication 1 October 2018 Wikipedia Summary Plan To start I will be fixing the introduction of my article as it is mess of facts about the article itself. Instead of trying to be a good summary of the article as a whole, it just lists all the ways perception is interpreted. Due to this, the introduction jumps very rapidly from one main point to the next often within one sentence. This leads it to it being unorganized. For example, the introduction has one paragraph that talks about perception from a biological point of view and then the very next paragraph jumps immediately to the view of perception from a psychological stand point. In fact, in the very same paragraph it also mentions perception from a philosophical view as well. The last paragraph then goes back to talking about perception through biology. This makes it seem like a collection of points that were just thrown together without much thought for order.

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