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To: Professor Wolfe From: Ilana Edelman Date: September 13, 2009 Subject: Homework #2 Unprofessional Business Document This is an e-mail that I received from Irma Hill titled “Human Resources Assistant.” After opening and reviewing the e-mail it is clear that the e-mail is spam and extremely unprofessional. Format and Language The e-mail lacked a proper introduction. Nowhere did it say “Hello” or “dear Ilana.” There was a lack of punctuation and grammar and the style of the e-mail itself was very odd. The e-mail used words such as “psyched” which is very unprofessional. Additionally there were extra spaces within words and
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Unformatted text preview: exclamation points were inserted midway through paragraphs. Subject Matter The body of the e-mail did not match the subject line, the e-mail simply said that there would be amazing offers on the next page. Improvements Although this e-mail is from a spammer there are ways to improve it which would have elicited a better response from the recipient (in this case myself). These include An introduction Proper spelling and grammar Description of what the actual job is A closing sentence A signoff from who the e-mail is from...
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This note was uploaded on 09/20/2009 for the course H ADM 165 taught by Professor Csnow during the Fall '08 term at Cornell University (Engineering School).

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