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Virginia Lieu German R5A Paul Dobryden October 6, 2009 For this peer editing report, I will be reviewing Lisa Chan’s paper, “Going Unnoticed,”  about Franz Kafka’s “The Starvation Artist.” Lisa begins by introducing a common mistake: “the  purpose one has for certain achievements stays consistent throughout one’s life.” This sentence  is a bit awkward but is a good way to begin the essay because she follows it with a contrasting  statement that leads into her main argument. She then begins to discuss how this issue relates  to her interpretations and observations in the “Starvation Artist.” Her thesis argues that the artist  starves both for his art and for the glory he gains from the public. However, because he evolved  from self-sufficiency to dependence on the public’s appreciation, when the public ignored him,  he dies. Though the thesis content itself is arguable and specific, it is weak grammatically. She  begins with “: Does the starvation artist take part in his art for self-honor and self-satisfaction or  for the glory gained from the interest and admiration that others invested in him.” I assume that 
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This note was uploaded on 10/25/2009 for the course GERMAN R5A taught by Professor Dobryden during the Fall '09 term at University of California, Berkeley.

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