Elisa_influential draft 2

Elisa_influential draft 2 - Elisa Lopez English...

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Unformatted text preview: Elisa Lopez English 198/Environment 100 1 Prior Rachel Carson’s Silent Spring , the government took no regard into the toxic chemicals that where were put into the environment : a tomic bombs exploded with no conscious thoughts of their long-term effects during World War Two. The primary goal was to end a war. Human I don’t quite follow this sentence Why comma here? Furthermore you may want to explain briefly what DDT is rather than a tool I like your stand here, very strong and direct. Odd word choice. I really don’t understand. My guess is “by combining” ? Again you could use other simple word like :elemental, basic,.. What issue specifically? Hard to understand!!! I have to use dictionary though. Why not use simple words like: harmful? How does it important to the issue of pesticide DDT? Why do you think that? Maybe add a little more analysis A little awkward. Suggestion: delete one “actually” because it doesn’t change the meaning of your sentence. I don’t get it. What fails to recognize before too late? bodies were said to be resistant to the bioaccumulation that impact the cells of animals and plants and human bodies were commonly thought of as “boundaries” to such chemicals. And products like, I don’t quite follow this sentence Why comma here? Furthermore you may want to explain briefly what DDT is rather than a tool I like your stand here, very strong and direct. Odd word choice. I really don’t understand. My guess is “by combining” ? Again you could use other simple word like :elemental, basic,.. What issue specifically? Hard to understand!!! I have to use dictionary though. Why not use simple words like: harmful? How does it important to the issue of pesticide DDT? Why do you think that? Maybe add a little more analysis A little awkward. Suggestion: delete one “actually” because it doesn’t change the meaning of your sentence. I don’t get it. What fails to recognize before too late? DDT was a tool in the agricultural and economic world, not the poison that is denounced by our government today. No other novel or literary piece could have busted open the door to the environment al more than Rachel Carson’s Silent Spring . Simultaneously, it I don’t quite follow this sentence Why comma here? Furthermore you may want to explain briefly what DDT is rather than a tool I like your stand here, very strong and direct. Odd word choice. I really don’t understand. My guess is “by combining” ? Again you could use other simple word like :elemental, basic,.. What issue specifically? Hard to understand!!! I have to use dictionary though. Why not use simple words like: harmful? How does it important to the issue of pesticide DDT?...
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