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Unformatted text preview: central theme of a story to this extent. Using adjectives like cool are ambiguous to the reader. Define cool or possibly use a different means of description I felt you had a tendency to insert quotations that drew away from the stories progression. That type of reinforcement I feel belongs in essays more than fictional stories. The middle dragged and I feel if the length was condensed this problem would be alleviated with ease....
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This note was uploaded on 02/19/2010 for the course QW crw1123 taught by Professor Bobsanchez during the Spring '10 term at University of Kelaniya.
- Spring '10