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Unformatted text preview: Suggestions: • I found that sometimes you obscure things for added effect when in reality calling the pill bottles “amber colored cylinders” might confuse the reader . • Sometimes I felt the plotline to be cliché and there by predictable. You have a good sense of your characters that you might to focus more on their immediate lives. Often I felt as if the plot was idea driven which drew away from the individual characters. • The ending didn’t hit me like I had hoped and I feel if you end it before you find out if she get’s cancer a lot of the small problems can be solved simultaneously....
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