Unformatted text preview: I felt as if there were several times when you should show instead of tell. The best way to do this is with character interactions and characterization through internal thought. The ending confused me and I felt as if you added too much ambiguity which fogged up the clarity of the plot. It is often advantageous to use concrete nouns more often than descriptive adjectives in order to relate directly to the reader....
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- Spring '10
- Steven McCommon Cienjuicious, Sebastian Ospina, small grammatical error