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Unformatted text preview: Suggestions: Why want to add more characters possibly to flesh out the story although this is more of a suggestions than a critique. Some changes in the perspective of the narrator which could possibly confuse the reader. Might want to keep the narrator in a close third person to the Bow Tie Guy or Stubble. Few grammatical errors which could be fixed with a simple proofread....
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This note was uploaded on 02/19/2010 for the course QW crw1123 taught by Professor Bobsanchez during the Spring '10 term at University of Kelaniya.
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