Unformatted text preview: Suggestions: • Why want to add more characters possibly to flesh out the story although this is more of a suggestions than a critique. • Some changes in the perspective of the narrator which could possibly confuse the reader. Might want to keep the narrator in a close third person to the Bow Tie Guy or Stubble. • Few grammatical errors which could be fixed with a simple proofread....
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- Spring '10
- Bow tie, Necktie, canarycolored bow tie, lleana Morales, Bow Tie Guy