Unformatted text preview: Why did she react the way she did? Who was he? Your writing was at best in the beginning and end, but the middle could use some fleshing out. The ending seemed a little over the top and didn’t serve to put the reader at ease. Foreshadowing could help clear up the ambiguity shrouding the ending. With some simple adjusting this story can be a great fiction story....
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- Spring '10
- wri ting, McCommon CRW, Fiction Writ, great fiction story