Ryota-argument_para-draft1- REW JP

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Ryota Watanabe ARW600AK 02/07/2010 Draft 1 It is better to read real books than to read electronic books on a device such as Kindle. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? 1
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Both reading tools It would be better to write “both real books and electronic books”. I think you had better change ‘give’ to ‘gives’ for grammar. This is a good transition! Could you write ‘that’ instead of ‘the price’? In my opinion, repeating same word is not simple sentence. Good transition,too! I am a little confused about this part. It would be better to write to notify exact meaning. You are good at dividing contents properly. I think it would be better to write “focusing on the display makes our eyes tired”. I can know your idea thoroughly because you write conclusion nicely.
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offer beneficial effects to us. However, reading real books giveIt would be better to write “both real books and electronic books”. I think you had better change ‘give’ to ‘gives’ for grammar. This is a good transition! Could you write ‘that’ instead of ‘the price’? In my opinion, repeating same word is not simple sentence. Good transition,too! I am a little confused about this part. It would be better to write to notify exact meaning. You are good at dividing contents properly. I think it would be better to write “focusing on the display makes our eyes tired”. I can know your idea thoroughly because you write conclusion nicely.
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us far superior benefit to reading electronic book. There are three main reasons for this.
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This note was uploaded on 02/24/2010 for the course MAT 3471 taught by Professor Gashs during the Spring '10 term at Punjab Engineering College.

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