Incorporating+Feedback - What feedback did you receive from...

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What feedback did you receive from your instructor? Thesis Statement: 1.) I used two incomplete sentences. Introduction: 1.) I should include the thesis statement as part of my introductory paragraph. 2.) I had run-on sentences in my introduction and conclusion paragraphs. 3.) Instead of using the word "amount" when discussing people use the word number. Body of the Paragraph: 1.) In paragraph four, last sentence the instructor did not understand what I was trying to say 2.) In paragraph eight through ten were completely off topic unless I state what stance each of the candidates have take in the issues. 3.) I also had run-on and fragmented sentences in parts of my essay. 4.) My major points were not well addressed, and lacked details. 5.) That I should use grammar check that is provided by Axia College. 6.) That for every piece of information that I used whether it be taken from a source, summarized, quoted or paraphrased, it must be cited within the body of the work. 7.) That I should use spell check to correct my spelling. From the peer reviewer? 1.) In the peer review, the reviewer indicated that I should include who should be held responsible for the massive amount of illegal immigrants entering the country each year. 2.) The peer reviewer also indicated that I should include more details, the consequences, and facts. 3.) The peer review felt that these two sentences were unclear
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This note was uploaded on 02/28/2010 for the course COM150 com150 taught by Professor Allysonwells during the Spring '10 term at University of Phoenix.

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