Unformatted text preview: it doesn’t promise everyone will reach the same ultimate goal. It also affects the individual negatively because they have no other reason for why they failed besides for they weren’t god enough. This paragraph did not need revising. Paragraph 4: Schaar states that there is nothing generous in telling a man he can only go as far as his talents permit while Sher believes that the argument could be dismissed. This claim did not contribute to my thesis, and had to be revised in order for describe how Sher could successfully object to Schaar’s arguments. Paragraph 5: Sher’s arguments are more successful than Schaar’s arguments This paragraph needed revising because it was based on paragraph 4...
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This note was uploaded on 03/03/2010 for the course -2 -1 at Cornell.