Unformatted text preview: woman managers; when you wrote "So I used some of her tips later that month at the company picnic that all the managers and their wives attended." you could have wrote "So I used some of the tips I learned later that month at the company picnic". Also when you referred to the "good old boys" not all managers are "good old boys" and when using a statement like this one many people may get offended, there is not a nice way to put this do not use statements like this one. A great way to prevent these types of mistakes is when referring to people and there job titles it is not necessary to include what sex they are. Ask yourself is it necessary? Will your sentence make sense if you do not include it? Another tip I would give to prevent these mistake is using the center for writing excellence. Another tip is have someone else read your paper for you....
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- Spring '10
- Writing, company picnic, good old boys