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Unformatted text preview: You need to have your last name, page number as your header. Jared Mezquita Mr. Tejada English 1102 9 September 2009 Movies Impact Those that Watch Them Today new movies are released every week, most people see them as entertainment, but what people dont see is that they are more than jus t Spacing mistake Try to be a little more formal, keep in mind your audience. Your writing is a bit to informal, as if you were just talking to friends. students awkward, try to reword needed try not to use words such as things, be specific and say what you mean. your students try not to use fillers like things awkward, maybe use commas do not repeat he is and he is go ahead and just combine them to be he is very confident and not portrayed as cocky. add some kind of break or even transition try not to end a sentence with a preposition. Spacing mistake Movies have influenced me or movies have influenced my life, dont say me In my You need a works citied page with at least two well known sources. that. Movies to me are important not just because I enjoy watching them but because they help me observe certain situations from a different perspective, they help me know what to expect in various scenarios, and they help me learn more about myself. Now not all films help me with these three factors, but the majority of cinema out there covers at least one of them. Movies are not completely the most accurate or always true stories, but they make you think while watching them, you automatically begin to think about how you would react in a scene from the movie if that was you. In these types of situations you are indirectly making decisions about yourself and viewing things from different points of view.Spacing mistake Try to be a little more formal, keep in mind your audience. Your writing is a bit to informal, as if you were just talking to friends. students awkward, try to reword needed try not to use words such as things, be specific and say what you mean. your students try not to use fillers like things awkward, maybe use commas do not repeat he is and he is go ahead and just combine them to be he is very confident and not portrayed as cocky. add some kind of break or even transition try not to end a sentence with a preposition. Spacing mistake Movies have influenced me or movies have influenced my life, dont say me In my You need a works citied page with at least two well known sources. One movie in particular that helped me look at things from a different perspective was the movie Freedom Writers by Richard LaGravenese. In this movie there is a group of students who go to school in a bad environment. They have no motivation to go to school, do homework, or graduate from high school. A new teacher showed up to teach this group of kids and with time she actually was able to get these students Spacing mistake Try to be a little more formal, keep in mind your audience. Your writing is a bit to informal, as if you were Try to be a little more formal, keep in mind your audience....
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