Brett LaroseENC 1101Section #0015Nathan Holic10/16/2009Peer Critique (AJ)To start, your first paragraph is very engaging for the most part. I would think about changing some of your first sentence though, because “intriguing to my eyes” sounds a little weird. As for your thesis statement, it has observations, but it doesn’t explain your opinion on the magazine. So just make sure that you talk about whether or not the magazine is effective towards the audience that it sells to. Your paper is filled with many detailed and excellent observations, but no
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