ENC 1101 Peer Review #3B

ENC 1101 Peer Review #3B - Brett Larose ENC 1101...

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Brett Larose ENC 1101 Section #0015 Nathan Holic 10/16/2009 Peer Critique (Corina) Your first paragraph has very good ideas and observations! The only problem with it though, is that it seems like you introduced the magazine Southern Seasons too fast. In other words, the connection between the first part of your paragraph and the second part didn’t sync as well as it could have. As for your thesis statement, I would include a little snippet as to why a laid-back, rich lifestyle is something that people should want so more of your opinion can shine through. Throughout your review, you mention the advertisements and letters to the
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