Brett LaroseENC 1101Section #0015Nathan Holic10/16/2009Peer Critique (Corina)Your first paragraph has very good ideas and observations! The only problem with it though, is that it seems like you introduced the magazine Southern Seasonstoo fast. In other words, the connection between the first part of your paragraph and the second part didn’t sync as well as it could have. As for your thesis statement, I would include a little snippet as to why a laid-back, rich lifestyle is something that people should want so more of your opinion can shine through.Throughout your review, you mention the advertisements and letters to the
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