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Unformatted text preview: Better: Because the press is often inaccurate, we should have more than one source for our news. 5. Thou shalt not use vague language. Poor: Bad things will happen if you don't surface right when you're scuba diving. Better: A scuba diver who comes to the surface faster than his bubbles risks severe injury from an air embolism. 6. Thou shalt not use muddled or incoherent language. Poor: Student parking permits at UVSC are a problem because the students park in places off campus where they don't have to pay and end up spending more. Better: The cost of student parking should be included in student fees. 7. Thou shalt not use figurative language. Poor: Cosmic Aeroplane is an oasis in Utah's literary desert. Better: Salt Lake City's Cosmic Aeroplane is unique among bookstores in Utah. You may want to make a copy of these to refer to while taking Lesson 7 Quiz in the quizzes section....
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