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Unformatted text preview: 5. Comment on the coherence of the essay. On the paper itself, note where transitions might be needed, or where a paragraph break might go. Comment on the effectiveness of the topic sentences, too. 6. How effective is the conclusion? Does it provide an adequate sense of completion? Reinforce the thesis without tedious repetition? How might it be improved? 7. Considering that this is for The Spartan Daily , does it seem appropriately designed for its audience. 8. Is the essay significantly improved, altered, and/or expanded? If all the writer did is fix the grammar mistakes I pointed out, warn him or her that this will not get a good grade! Also, remember that both Andrea Franiers and Thomas Friedmans essays should both be discussed, at least briefly. If the improvement/expansion has been minimal, how might it be improved? 1 2...
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