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Unformatted text preview: Dear Matthew, I really enjoyed reading your paper on gender. I have always been interested in gender differences, and i feel like you did an exceptional job of writing about it from your own point of view. The extensive research shows throughout your paper, and I feel like you cited valuable references. Besides some grammar problems that need to be fixed, I feel like you may want to combine some of your shorter sentences together using conjunctions rather than having back to back short sentences. You have a great format in your paper, a strong introduction, intriguing personal experiences, and great direction. Keep up the good work. Dear Katie, I think your paper was very thought provoking. It was very informational and I appreciate you sharing your life experiences. You used great references, and the insight you provide is extremely compelling. The is a good use of vobulary; however, you may want to try to use different transition words to keep your paper flowing. I enjoyed reading your paper because it was different transition words to keep your paper flowing....
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