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Dear James, I really enjoyed reading the rough draft of your paper. It seems to me that you have many great ideas and a good sense of direction in your paper. I was tuned in to your introduction because I could relate and knew what you were trying to describe. I felt like you used a great voice throughout your paper as you described various thoughts. You may want to consider being a little more concise in the beginning of your paper and include some of the things you are going to discuss in your paper so there is a stronger relationship among your body paragraphs/main ideas. Dear Ashley, Hey I enjoyed reading your paper and I found it very well written. You used a great format to follow which helps your readers follow along. Your introduction was very clear and concise, and it gets your message across. There was a good usage of topic sentences throughout the body of the essay within each paragraph. You may want to include some of your own thoughts and opinions on the topic. A personal experience may
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This note was uploaded on 09/08/2010 for the course COMM 100W at San Jose State.

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