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Unformatted text preview: g. Good transition statements. Overall, paper flows together well. h. 3 rd paragraph: 2 nd sentence might be a little wordy but it seems okay. Other that, great job varying sentence structure and avoiding wordiness. i. One thing I would suggest is to make it more clear what the difference is between each of the paragraphs. They all kind of seemed to be conveying the same idea (good that your evidence all supports your argument, just try to show that it is coming from different areas). Maybe in the conclusion you could try to relate the ideals to our world today? Something that will make the conclusion and overall purpose of the paper more powerful. j. Include the title of the work in your paper’s title. Try to make it a little catchier too....
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This note was uploaded on 09/18/2010 for the course ROM S 105 at Cornell.