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Unformatted text preview: Theodore Hanson French R1A 1/31/2010 Emotional Endurance In the late nineteenth I wrote out nineteenth I’m sorry I said hobby I meant profession. More background is added since it is confusing to just say stuff happens Here’s a quotation on the futility of saving the Venus I changed topic sentence to agree I’ll be honest, the previous organization sucked and was confusing so I decided to completely rewrite the essay… Evidence to prove the statue throwing rocks. I deleted half the paragraph that was very badly written and replaced it with two concise sentences that connect the ideas Tried to transition… The name archeologist is confusing This used to be the first paragraph, but I felt it fit better here because I just brought into light the “life” of the statue I moved this from the third paragraph to help build on the power of the statue Paraphrased to bring the in the PS as the narrators continued interest in the statue until the end. A new thesis to agree with the paragraph Attempt to connect the memory with the proof for similarity Attempt to disprove thesis I deleted two paragraphs because of their differing topics and added this one which isn’t quite as strong. Evidence to prove the statue throwing rocks. I got rid of the audience sentence to make it more concrete century “Reign of Terror,” much of the French population was calling into questionquestioned the solidity and perseverance of the past after the Reign of Terror. Prosper Mérimée, , as inspector general of historical monuments, sought to protect and reinforce these few mystical historical monuments that remainedpreserve France’s material history. As a hobby he wrote of his journeys, Merimee I wrote out nineteenth I’m sorry I said hobby I meant profession. More background is added since it is confusing to just say stuff happens Here’s a quotation on the futility of saving the Venus I changed topic sentence to agree I’ll be honest, the previous organization sucked and was confusing so I decided to completely rewrite the essay… Evidence to prove the statue throwing rocks. I deleted half the paragraph that was very badly written and replaced it with two concise sentences that connect the ideas Tried to transition… The name archeologist is confusing This used to be the first paragraph, but I felt it fit better here because I just brought into light the “life” of the statue I moved this from the third paragraph to help build on the power of the statue Paraphrased to bring the in the PS as the narrators continued interest in the statue until the end. A new thesis to agree with the paragraph Attempt to connect the memory with the proof for similarity Attempt to disprove thesis I deleted two paragraphs because of their differing topics and added this one which isn’t quite as strong....
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