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Unformatted text preview: we disrupt this fundamental momentum: You are loved by me. The second example creates a a right to left motion as me, the final word, performs the action upon you, the first word. Moreover, the sentence is 66% longer than the first, an excess that could render a longer sentence wholly unreadable: Concise: The warehouse's manager called Jim and questioned him regarding that morning's shipment. (12 words; 0 be verbs and propositions). Wordy: Jim was called and questioned by the manager of the warehouse as to the shipment of that morning (18 words; 6 be verbs and prepositions). If you doubt the first sentence's superiority, have someone read each sentence aloud and then try repeating them. You'll find the first much more memorable....
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