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Eliminating the Verb Be and Prepositions Expository writing demands clarity and conciseness. How can you lead someone through complex critical logic without ensuring that that the path you clear avoids the bogs and bumps that vague, wordy constructions create? Eliminating prolix passages becomes easier when you understand that the language naturally maintains its structural clarity unless we pad our sentences with useless forms of the verb to be and prepositions, neither of which conveys significant information. Consider this simple sentence: I love you. Note that the sentence's momentum flows from left to right (SVO), that the subject, “I,” acts upon the object, “you.” English depends upon this left to right motion, the direction of the printed language. However, when a be verb and a preposition pad the sentence,
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Unformatted text preview: we disrupt this fundamental momentum: You are loved by me. The second example creates a a right to left motion as me, the final word, performs the action upon you, the first word. Moreover, the sentence is 66% longer than the first, an excess that could render a longer sentence wholly unreadable: Concise: The warehouse's manager called Jim and questioned him regarding that morning's shipment. (12 words; 0 be verbs and propositions). Wordy: Jim was called and questioned by the manager of the warehouse as to the shipment of that morning (18 words; 6 be verbs and prepositions). If you doubt the first sentence's superiority, have someone read each sentence aloud and then try repeating them. You'll find the first much more memorable....
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