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Unformatted text preview: started off when the girl was eating and you described this really weird guy who was being very creepy to this sweet little good looking girl. Then you go off and describe how beautiful she is and how he comes to her house when her family was gone. He was talking all sweet to her, and trying to get her to ride with him. The first impression which I had and many of my class had was that something very bad ends up happening to this little girl. However, this was a very well written story and was very descriptive. The only thing which I suggest would be to finish the ending and make it very in depth. Sincerely, Chris Hopper...
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