stierras paper - over the paper and didnt find one thing...

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JD Lester Stierra’s Paper 9-1-10 Is there any place where the reader starts to lose interest? - Over all you kept the paper interesting and never lost my interest. However you could try to get the reader involved more. It is not boring by any means but it could be a little more exciting. Have I avoided stating the obvious? - Actually I think you have done a good job avoiding stating the obvious. I read
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Unformatted text preview: over the paper and didnt find one thing that seemed obvious to me. Do my ideas flow logically from one to another?- The paper could be structured a little better. I would pretty much switch my second and third paragraph. Talk about how lowering the age could increase the overall turnout first, then talk about what the lawmakers in California are debating....
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This note was uploaded on 05/03/2011 for the course ENGL 1102 taught by Professor Staff during the Spring '08 term at Georgia Southern University .

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