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Welcome to WritePoint, the automated review system that recognizes errors most commonly made by university students in academic essays. The system embeds comments into your paper and suggests possible changes in grammar and style. Please evaluate each comment carefully to ensure that the suggested change is appropriate for your paper, but remember that your instructor's preferences for style and format prevail. You will also need to review your own citations and references since WritePoint capability in this area is limited. Thank you for using WritePoint. Marijuana has always raised [Doctoral-level comment (also recommended for any academic writer)--do not divide two-part verb beginning with has/have/had. Try to place "always" before or after the two-part verb (has raised)--"always has raised" or "has raised always" (or place "always" later in the sentence)] a very big eyebrow in almost every American home. Those that are [Writing suggestion: see if the sentence can be rewritten to remove "that are"] for legalizing the use of the cannabis most believe its use is to smoke it, but those that do [If this refers to people, they are never "that" or "which," they are "who"] not choose to use marijuana are thought to be in favor of keeping it illegal. Opposing views on the subject of decriminalizing the plant has caused much controversy over the past twenty [Express numbers higher than nine in digits (when not the first word in the sentence)] years and still remains an important issue. The legalization of marijuana in the Unites States would drastically reduce crime in our [Use "we," "us," or "our" to mean yourself and coauthors, not general humanity (or yourself and the reader)] cities and form a more productive society through its positive uses. The ongoing war for drugs deals with every people of society. Every year, the United States government is spending large amounts of money to control drug use and to enforce laws which [Use "that" for a restrictive phrase (or place a comma before "which")] are to protect society from the hazards of drugs. Some concur that the war against drugs is not needed and that we has already lost the war on drugs and the only [Run-on sentence: place a comma before "and"] way to fix the problem to end most of the fighting altogether is by decriminalizing the use of marijuana. William Buckley said, "Pot is harmful, but people should not go to jail for smoking it" (Buckley 1A [Write out numbers under 10] ). Buckley a college professor at Columbian University has came [The participle form is "come"] forward to say he smoked marijuana on a worldwide televised show in 1973. At the time Buckley was quoted [The passive voice is a form of "be" (was) and a participle (quoted). Over-use of the passive
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This note was uploaded on 05/08/2011 for the course ALL 101 taught by Professor Grecthem during the Spring '11 term at University of Phoenix.

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