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1 The Importance of Marriage Speak Now or Forever Hold Your Peace: The Importance of Marriage Gus Arrieta COM/150 May 2, 2010 Leisha Anderson Speak Now or Forever Hold Your Peace: The Importance of Marriage
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2 The Importance of Marriage A lot of [Only commercial shipments and real estate are measured in lots. To use "a lot of" to mean "many," "much," or "a large amount" is a colloquialism (not universally clear). Use another term.] others think that marriage isn’t important because of the habit to cohabitate as society has such downsize to what the value of marriage has become. The marriage adventure grew so tainted with a negative reputation that no one wants to commit to these days. Besides the divorce rate does not help the fact that [Wordiness--"the fact that" can often be reduced to simply "that"] marriage is a big deal. Those who decide to commit to marriage usually have a habit to be under the influence of their own dosages of love bug bites. The importance of this essay is to establish some sort of order to what marriage is supposed [The passive voice is a form of "be" (is) and a participle (supposed). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Try to use the active voice most often, e.g., the student completed the paper on time. The passive voice version--The paper was completed on time by the student--See eCampus > Center for Writing Excellence > Tutorials & Guides > Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice] to be. In This essay, expect to take a journey into roots of where [If not referring to a place, instead of "where," use "in which"] marriage grew from. To the importance of patience and all [Try to eliminate "all" or "all of"; often the meaning is the same without these words] the practical factors that distort when two hearts beat passionately for one another, this essay will reveal the actual [Cliché: "actual" and "actually" are weak words whose meaning is nothing more than "in point of fact." They are often used as intensifiers but usually can be deleted with no change in meaning ] significance that develops from one’s [Check spelling--remove the apostrophe if the word is not possessive] individual time with themselves in the single life. This essay will journey into the final ultimatum that everyone fears to hear just before the deal seals, “Speak now, or forever hold your peace”. [A period or comma goes inside the closing quotation mark] The typical road to tales of romance and to the happily ever after paradise begins with the much needed patience and ideal time to concentrate on who the person is, their [Check pronoun agreement--if "their" refers to "person" (or a singular subject), it should be singular, too (his or her)] interests and passions, desires are one way to see the relationship on screen before yourselves. The dreaming part is always the measure of surreal adventures where [use "in which"] no limits and boundaries can hold you [Do not use second person in academic writing.]
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