nicky Valentine peer review

nicky Valentine peer review - Writer's Name Nicky Valentine...

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Writer's Name Nicky Valentine Reviewer's Name Kelli Lorenc Peer Review 1) What type of hook does this essay begin with?Write the hook here.Is it effective?Does it make you want to keep reading to find out what the writer is talking about?What does the writer have in the middle of the introductory paragraph:background material, preview, other information?Does the writer use the thesis statement given for the assignment? “Here is some important information you should be aware of regarding Television” I do feel that the hook is effective. And it dose make me want to continue to read it. The writer has taken information from an article in the webMd and yes the thesis statement was used that was given for the assignment. 2) What is the first support? The writer should be discussing something either positive or negative about TV. Does this support seem sufficiently focused, or is it too broad to handle in only one paragraph? If it is too broad, suggest a sharper focus that the writer could concentrate on. Does the paragraph have a clear topic sentence? Write the topic sentence here. Which mode of rhetoric (tool of writing) is prevalent in this paragraph? Are there at least three major supports for the topic sentence? Does each of them have at least two details? Are the details vivid and specific? Are there any sentences or bits of information that are off-topic? The first support given is how tv can educate our children. And it was a positvie asspect to tv and I felt that this support was explained well. “positive aspect of television is that it poses an opportunity to educate our children.” yes there are at least three major supports and each of them has two details and the details are vivid and specific. I didnt see any sentences that were
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This note was uploaded on 05/20/2011 for the course ENG 98 taught by Professor W during the Spring '11 term at University of Phoenix.

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