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Writer's Name Kelli Lorenc Reviewer's Name David Galloway ___________________ Search Essay Peer Review 1)What type of hook does this essay begin with? The television is an unavoidable technology that shapes people's lives, one that can both benefit and harm its viewers. Is it effective? Yes Does it make you want to keep reading to find out what the writer is talking about? Yes What does the writer have in the middle of the introductory paragraph: background material, preview, other information? The choices a child makes can be lacking in developmental/educational value and can cause them to lack the necessary lessons a child should have to develop and grow at a healthy social and cognitive rate. Does the writer use the thesis statement given for the assignment? Yes. No references are given to support introductory paragraph. Therefore the reader is unable to verify the writer’s claims about the benefits and harmful effects television has on children. 2) What is the first support? One benefit of television for young children is education. The writer should be discussing something either positive or negative about TV. Does this support seem sufficiently focused, or is it too broad to handle in only one paragraph? It is focused on the topic. If it is too broad, suggest a sharper focus that the writer could concentrate on. Does the paragraph have a clear topic sentence? The television is an unavoidable technology that shapes people's lives, one that can both benefit and harm its viewers. Which mode of rhetoric (tool of writing) is prevalent in this paragraph? The writer is using the rhetoric of persuasion so readers might understand the benefits and harmful effects of television. Are there at least three major supports for the topic sentence? Yes. Does each of them have at least two details? Not each of them. Are the details vivid and specific? Yes. What the writer explained was clear. Are there any sentences or bits of information that are off-topic? No. 3)What is the second support? The young child needs to see and hear as they learn. The writer should discuss the opposite characteristic as in the last paragraph. . Does this support seem
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