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Writer's Name Kelli Lorenc ___ Reviewer's Name __Nick Valentine 1) What type of hook does this essay begin with? Write the hook here. Is it effective? Does it make you want to keep reading to find out what the writer is talking about? What does the writer have in the middle of the introductory paragraph: background material, preview, other information? Does the writer have a clearly stated thesis statement? What is the specific topic of the essay? Does the writer make this clear in the thesis statement? What is the attitude of the essay? Write the thesis statement here. Is the thesis statement tightly written, or could the writer say the same thing in fewer words? If so, how ? As tattoos get more and more popular. The hook was not effect because it is incomplete. Most of the time people don't know who to go to, how much it will hurt, and what they can do to fix a tattoo if they don't like it. All of these issues are dependent on the person who wants the tattoo. I think this is the thesis: Its not easy to make any choice when it comes to tattoos, from perminant make-up to a small butterfly on your ankle. To ease some fears I will go over the topics of where to get tattoos done, pain, and what to do if you hate it after. The first paragraph is choppy maybe you should combine the two. 2) What is the first support? Does the paragraph have a clear topic sentence? Write the topic sentence here. Which mode of rhetoric (tool or writing) is prevalent in this paragraph? Are there at least three major supports for the topic sentence? Does each of them have at least two details? Are the details
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This note was uploaded on 05/20/2011 for the course ENG 98 taught by Professor W during the Spring '11 term at University of Phoenix.

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