Pohlman 1 Saxony Pohlman ENG-349-T4000 Int. Fiction Writing Workshop 20EW4 3/14/2020 2-2 Journal “Show, Don’t Tell” Writing Exercise Original Story Scene: “Then Frodo stepped up to the great grey net, and hewed it with a wide sweeping stroke, drawing the bitter edge swiftly across a ladder of close-strung cords, and at once springing away. The blue-gleaming blade shore through them like a scythe through grass, and they leaped and writhed and then hung loose. A great rent was made. Stroke after stroke he dealt, until at last all the web within his reach was shattered, and the upper portion blew and swayed like a loose veil in the incoming wind. The trap was broken. “Come!” cried Frodo. “On! On!” Wild joy at their escape from the very mouth of despair suddenly filled his mind. His head whirled as with a draught of potent wine. He sprang out, shouting as he came.” (Tolkien, 821-822) Story Scene Rewrite: Taking a deep breath to calm the beating of his heart, as well as to control the queasiness
