In my opinion, the most effective paragraph is the 2nd paragraph. It speaks about the credit card companies tricking consumers with their unfair fine prints that is not easy to understand. This paragraph was written with good sense of sentence variety and rhythm in mind. The second paragraph I chose to write about was the paragraph # 1. Even though the grammar and spelling is correct, but it did not have a good sentence variety and rhythm, which makes it look like writing of a middle school student. The author wrote “My Aunt Martha went to a lawyer to get a will, I did my will online. My dad died in 1988. He didn’t have a will.” I would have written this sentence as follows: “My Aunt Martha hired a lawyer to help her with her will. I prepared mine online, but unfortunately my father did not have a will when he died in 1988.” According to WritePoint, I should not use a phrase like “In my opinion” because I am the writer of this paragraph, so
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