Erna Williams_Peer_Review_Worksheet

Erna - Peer Response Checklist Directions Use the checklist below for your peer reviews Please copy and paste the paper you are reviewing below the

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Peer Response Checklist Directions: Use the checklist below for your peer reviews. Please copy and paste the paper you are reviewing below the checklist. Keep in mind that this assignment is graded and that your grade will be determined by how detailed your review is. A best practice is to provide a detailed explanation for each answer--approximately a paragraph. Not required, but strongly suggested: Use Track Changes to add your comments and suggestions to the appropriate areas in the paper. 1. Writer's Name: Erna Williams 2. What is the type and purpose of this paper? This was a persuasive essay regarding Social security issues and future of it. 2. What is the thesis of this paper? Does it reflect the topic and purpose of the paper? The intention of this writer was to talk about our future and how it depends on reforming social security in order to guarantee a comfortable retirement. 3. What is the biggest problem area of the paper? (Organization, development of ideas, grammar, punctuation, etc.) Explain your answer. I think there was more information in very first paragraph than the rest of the essay. 4. What is the biggest strength of the paper? Explain your answer. I really like how the paper started, with quote from president bush, which shows that writer has done his/her research very well. I also liked the numbers, which really help to better understand the issue of social security. 5. What material doesn't seem to fit the main point or the audience? Are all of the topic sentences points of the thesis? Are all of the support sentences facts, examples, reasons, etc. to explain the topic sentence? If not, which need revision? I think material fit just fine, however some topic sentences could use a little improvements. 6. At what point does the paper fail to hold the reader's interest? Where should more details or examples be added? Why? If the paper has good detail, point out these areas, too. I would say after body paragraph two, paper fail to hold interest. In my opinion this essay is based on numbers, examples and quotes. Supporting paragraphs can use more details. This is my favorite part of the essay: “… the worker-to-beneficiary ratio has fallen from 16.5-to-1 in 1950 to 3.3-to-1 today. Within 40 years it will be 2-to-1. At that ratio there will not be enough workers to pay scheduled benefits at current tax rates” It’s the best way to understand how the system works.
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7. Where is the organization confusing? What suggestions do you have for the writer? If the writing is
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This note was uploaded on 06/24/2011 for the course COMP 100 taught by Professor Dfgdegg during the Spring '08 term at DeVry Chicago O'Hare.

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Erna - Peer Response Checklist Directions Use the checklist below for your peer reviews Please copy and paste the paper you are reviewing below the

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