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Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988 WRITING (ESSAY) SCORE SHEET Student Name: 1093 Date: June 24, 2011 Grader’s Name: Tiffany I. Purpose of the Essay : __1__ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) II. Organization : __1___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) III. Use of Sentences : __2___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) IV. Choice of Words : __3___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) V. Grammar & Usage : __3___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) VI. Overall Impressions : __1___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) TOTAL (Divide total score by six to obtain final essay score): 1.8 Comments: Purpose of essay: No concrete examples (use examples from literature, history, or current events) Not much purpose in the essay, only gives theoretical situations and what would happen – make sure you use concrete examples Organization:
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Unformatted text preview: Has an introduction and conclusion (conclusion kind of weak), but no supporting examples Use of sentences • Good, varied sentence structures • Watch out for run-on sentences—third paragraph is basically one sentence, which is way too long Choice of words • Use more sophisticated vocabulary • Don’t use contractions (“he’d,” “doesn’t,” etc) //home/vdimitrov/5866/cd550d366d44de1edb95ed53818058c3589d256c.docx 6/10/11 Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988 • Don’t use “you” Grammar & Usage • Good grammar Overall impressions • Too short, try to make it two pages • Nice elaboration on thesis, would have been significantly more effective if you used concrete examples //home/vdimitrov/5866/cd550d366d44de1edb95ed53818058c3589d256c.docx 6/10/11...
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