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Unformatted text preview: Has an introduction and conclusion (conclusion kind of weak), but no supporting examples Use of sentences • Good, varied sentence structures • Watch out for run-on sentences—third paragraph is basically one sentence, which is way too long Choice of words • Use more sophisticated vocabulary • Don’t use contractions (“he’d,” “doesn’t,” etc) //home/vdimitrov/5866/cd550d366d44de1edb95ed53818058c3589d256c.docx 6/10/11 Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988 • Don’t use “you” Grammar & Usage • Good grammar Overall impressions • Too short, try to make it two pages • Nice elaboration on thesis, would have been significantly more effective if you used concrete examples //home/vdimitrov/5866/cd550d366d44de1edb95ed53818058c3589d256c.docx 6/10/11...
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- Spring '11
- Writing, concrete examples, Grammar & Usage