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Unformatted text preview: two body paragraphs conclusion)-Introduce two examples in introduction Use of sentences-Variety of sentences, good job Choice of words -Language is okay, not too casual, but can use more sophisticated vocabulary Grammar & Usage-Spelling errors: definitely, not definately" //home/vdimitrov/5861/442bd4f848ff84dd2f209d411ca2e7f228363dc6.docx 6/10/11 Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988-Could shorten some sentences: .definitely not a savage nor he was dirty. . definitely not a dirty savage. Overall impressions-Examples given were not strong enough-Work on organization and stronger examples -Few minor spelling and grammatical errors //home/vdimitrov/5861/442bd4f848ff84dd2f209d411ca2e7f228363dc6.docx 6/10/11...
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- Spring '11