1473.online7_TKedited

1473.online7_TKedited - instead of giving two examples and...

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Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988 WRITING (ESSAY) SCORE SHEET Student Name: 1473 Date: June 24, 2011 Grader’s Name: Tiffany I. Purpose of the Essay : __2__ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) II. Organization : __4___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) III. Use of Sentences : __3__ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) IV. Choice of Words : __3___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) : __3___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) VI. Overall Impressions : __2__ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) TOTAL (Divide total score by six to obtain final essay score): 2.83 Comments: Purpose of essay: - Good thesis - First example is okay, but try to get the title and author of the short story (“The Lottery”) - Second body paragraph is kind of messy—choose one example and elaborate on it
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Unformatted text preview: instead of giving two examples and not really elaborating Organization: -Good organization, nice use of transitions-Hook is kind of awkward Use of sentences-A lot of simple sentences, try combining a few sentences and making them compound sentences Choice of words -Could use more sophisticated vocabulary //home/vdimitrov/5908/51998af0c636383a863c4ba79e80caaccf400315.docx 6/10/11 Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988 Grammar & Usage-Great grammar! Overall impressions-Good thesis, but make sure you have two strong examples backed by a thorough elaboration //home/vdimitrov/5908/51998af0c636383a863c4ba79e80caaccf400315.docx 6/10/11...
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