1491.bb1_TKedited - -Good varied sentence structures-Some run-ons Choice of words-Could be more sophisticated Grammar&

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Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988 WRITING (ESSAY) SCORE SHEET Student Name: 1491 Date: June 24, 2011 Grader’s Name: Tiffany I. Purpose of the Essay : __2__ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) II. Organization : __3___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) III. Use of Sentences : __2__ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) IV. Choice of Words : __3___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) : __2___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) VI. Overall Impressions : __2__ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) TOTAL (Divide total score by six to obtain final essay score): 2.33 Comments: Purpose of essay: - Good thesis - Okay examples, but use concrete examples from literature, history, or current events to support your thesis Organization: - Good organization and use of transitions - Use hook before introduction - Conclusion is cut off, probably ran out of time (recap thesis and two examples) Use of sentences
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Unformatted text preview: -Good varied sentence structures-Some run-ons Choice of words -Could be more sophisticated Grammar & Usage //home/vdimitrov/5876/4b9db22edcc92dff1099582e6775339f91e8f6c1.docx 6/10/11 Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988-Make sure you use ‘however’ when the two parts are opposite-Some awkward sentences: “The conclusion, as I reached, and others came to as well, was that first impressions are too commonly affected by beliefs already engrained in as firm past experiences, however irrational to a keen observer.” “The conclusion that most people reached was that first impressions are often affected by engrained beliefs from past experiences.” Overall impressions-Good thesis, but make sure you have concrete examples-Good grammar but some run-ons //home/vdimitrov/5876/4b9db22edcc92dff1099582e6775339f91e8f6c1.docx 6/10/11...
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This note was uploaded on 07/19/2011 for the course ECON 102 taught by Professor Shah during the Spring '11 term at Thammasat University.

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