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Unformatted text preview: -Good varied sentence structures-Some run-ons Choice of words -Could be more sophisticated Grammar & Usage //home/vdimitrov/5876/4b9db22edcc92dff1099582e6775339f91e8f6c1.docx 6/10/11 Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988-Make sure you use ‘however’ when the two parts are opposite-Some awkward sentences: “The conclusion, as I reached, and others came to as well, was that first impressions are too commonly affected by beliefs already engrained in as firm past experiences, however irrational to a keen observer.” “The conclusion that most people reached was that first impressions are often affected by engrained beliefs from past experiences.” Overall impressions-Good thesis, but make sure you have concrete examples-Good grammar but some run-ons //home/vdimitrov/5876/4b9db22edcc92dff1099582e6775339f91e8f6c1.docx 6/10/11...
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