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Unformatted text preview: -Organization should be introduction (hook, thesis, and introduction of two examples) body paragraphs conclusion Use of sentences-A lot of run-ons Choice of words -Vocabulary could be more sophisticated, but language was formal enough to let the paper flow well-Dont use you in essay //home/vdimitrov/5861/5dc50096cd41956b894d1a1cdaa2604410199ec9.docx 6/10/11 Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988 Grammar & Usage-Dont start a sentence with but-Spelling errors: judgment, not judgement Overall impressions-No examples, paper is quite disorientedchoose a side and stick with it-Paper should be two pages long //home/vdimitrov/5861/5dc50096cd41956b894d1a1cdaa2604410199ec9.docx 6/10/11...
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- Spring '11