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Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988 WRITING (ESSAY) SCORE SHEET Student Name: 1847 Date: June 24, 2011 Grader’s Name: Tiffany I. Purpose of the Essay : __1__ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) II. Organization : __1___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) III. Use of Sentences : __2__ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) IV. Choice of Words : __3___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) : __2___ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) VI. Overall Impressions : __1__ (1 - 6; 1 is lowest, 6 is highest) TOTAL (Divide total score by six to obtain final essay score): 1.67 Comments: Purpose of essay: - Too short to make a point - No concrete examples (use two examples from literature, history, or current events) - No thesis Organization: - Barely organized (has idea of introduction and conclusion, but no body paragraphs)
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Unformatted text preview: -Organization should be introduction (hook, thesis, and introduction of two examples) body paragraphs conclusion Use of sentences-A lot of run-ons Choice of words -Vocabulary could be more sophisticated, but language was formal enough to let the paper flow well-Dont use you in essay //home/vdimitrov/5861/5dc50096cd41956b894d1a1cdaa2604410199ec9.docx 6/10/11 Ivy Review 43625 Mission Blvd., Suite #207 Fremont, CA 94539 Tel: 1-888-777-1988 Grammar & Usage-Dont start a sentence with but-Spelling errors: judgment, not judgement Overall impressions-No examples, paper is quite disorientedchoose a side and stick with it-Paper should be two pages long //home/vdimitrov/5861/5dc50096cd41956b894d1a1cdaa2604410199ec9.docx 6/10/11...
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